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I'm Maru Hayama. My parents died in a car accident. I have no brothers or sisters, I am an only child. I live alone in an apartment next to a friend. I am 14-years-old, in 9th grade. I'm the school's best artist. I am the president of the anime/manga club. Today is the first day of school.
Walking down the hall, I see Kaoru Dijiama. The most popular boy in school. Girls fangirling. "KYAA! KAORU-KUN!! KAKOII!!" Makes me wanna barf. He steps up to be as I open my locker. Did I forget to mention that he's my best friend? "Hey Maru! You look so cute in your highschool uniform!" I slam my locker shut, only having my English textbook out. "Not too shabby yourself.." I could see that his fangirls were mad at me. "bye girls~" The group of girls fell on the floor as if they were hit with a ray of love.
First Period: Mr. Kotonoha's class
Kaoru and I are passing notes. I had just confessed my feelings in that note. Then, the teacher catches us. "Mr. Dijiama, may I see that note?" His death stare was in process "U-Uhh....H-hey-!" Critical. Mr. Kotonoha snatched it away and started reading it. "What? You like me? I-I didn't kn-" Kaoru punched Mr. Kotonoha right in the face. "YOU CAN'T JUST INVADE PEOPLE'S PRIVACY LIKE THAT!!" I stood up from my chair and tried to stop him. "St-STOP!! YOU'RE GOING TO GET HURT AND I DON'T WANT THAT!!" Then, you could hear the fangirls. "KAORU!! KAORU!! GOOO KAORU!! YAY!!" The principal came running through the door. He grabbed Kaoru's arm and dragged him to his office. "LET ME GO!!" principal Kana stared at me and told me to come with her. I follow.
In-Between First Period: Principal's office
I only heard her say 2 words. "You're expelled" I was shocked. My tears weren't held back, and I was bursting with depression. Her words pierced into my soul. School was my only social life. We both left the office feeling sad as ever. "Hey...Maru." I turn my wet head to face his embarrassed, sad head. "ya?" He didn't hold back. He did what he wanted to. He did what was right, he always did. But it was different this time. It was destiny that brought us together. Kaoru Dijiama has stolen my very first kiss.
Let me guess, this was inspired by a school harem anime?
The only thing I'd say do is beef it up a little. Add more detail to develop characters rather than just say who they are or just give a simple background/
Go into detail. How did her parents death, and her lonlieness effect her? Does art, manga, and anime help with that? Do these hobbies help ease her sorrow and lonesomensss? How can she legally live on her own at the age of 14? This definitely feels like an anime put into words. Not saying that's a bad thing though.